Toy Looking to get better

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Toy Looking to get better

Postby Bliz on Wed Jan 26, 2011 7:15 pm

Hey guys, I just started writing about 4 months ago. Im just looking to get better. Crits are welcomed! Heres my sh*t. Sorry for it being the tilted the wrong way. Its how my scanner is. Try not to break ur neck looking at it.

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Re: Toy Looking to get better

Postby godless on Wed Jan 26, 2011 7:27 pm

welcome to the forum duder! we generally don't like ppl making a lot of new threads for stuff that could be placed somewhere more appropriate. head over here and introduce yourself proper like. then you can go to the Toy Box and post up your work to get crits from other more experienced writers. but i can at least give you this quick tip for your graf, go simpler. you're going to hear that a lot around here, it means work on basic letter structure, copy the letters on your keyboard or the logos off products around your house. this will help you build a basic understanding of how letters are put together.
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Re: Toy Looking to get better

Postby Bliz on Wed Jan 26, 2011 7:47 pm

kk thanks for the info
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Re: Toy Looking to get better

Postby Coffee on Wed Jan 26, 2011 10:43 pm

Lose the crowns.
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Re: Toy Looking to get better

Postby godless on Wed Jan 26, 2011 11:24 pm

moar arrowz
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Re: Toy Looking to get better

Postby conky on Thu Jan 27, 2011 12:39 am

You best be trollin with all this arrow and crown sh*t. I seriously just threw up in my mouth a little.
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